感觉译文有些Chinglish的味道。

绝对的中国式英语，动词都在前面，从前往后的直译，呵呵。还有各种词汇，比如大师技艺，技艺这时候用technician就不好了，不如用craft更纯正。太多了，呵呵。

Cold sterilization tec.     Sterillize materials by very low temperature,marry materials better.   Glacier water source     Glacier water source from Longmen mountain give u pure fermenting cigar.  Unique barrel fermenting  Degrading the nicotin richly, make the aroma richer.

Cold sterilization tec.? ???
Sterillize materials by very low temperature,marry materials better.?

Glacier water source? ???
Glacier water source from Longmen mountain give u pure fermenting cigar.?

Unique barrel fermenting??
Degrading the nicotin richly, make the aroma richer.   

The master craft
The inheriting of master craft we fetch you same feeling as those great men before.

Inspect strictly   
By inspect the cigars one by one,  guaranty the perfect qulity we present to you.  

真有出口在国外，秘制这词并不合适，连云南白药都公布配方，他们对秘制不感冒，适得其反。

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每一条题目都是三个单词，那第五条改成one by one 吧！