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This month I organised some writing activities but few people actually participated.
I guess I'm better off putting such activities to an end.

The reason it being so unpopular, in my eyes, is that writing an essay is quite off-putting for many.
Maybe it's better for me to change the form.

Now the idea I've got is to replace the writing activities with paraphrase practices.

What is the paraphrase practice?
Okay, here is an example.
Original sentence:
Genetic drugs cannot bring too much profit to drug producers so the drug producers are not too motivated to produce genetic drugs.

After the sentence being paraphrased:
Narrow profit margins for generic drugs have limited the incentive to produce them.


As you guys can see, the original sentence is quite long, and have too many repeats (drug producers, genetic drugs)
The main thing here is that the original sentence is quite Chinglish (probably some people are even having difficulty writing sentence like this...)

I am thinking about posting typical Chinglish sentences on a regular basis and you guys can feel free to post your paraphrased version down my post.
As long as you have participated, I will give you some BB bonus ranging from One to Five.

I will later post my version of the paraphrased sentence (can be from local news) and @ every single one of you who participated.

I appreciate your advice and feedback.
Please post your suggestions and ideas down here, thanks!

[ Last edited by Lopemann on 2013-12-26 at 12:51 ]
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2Â¥2013-12-26 12:57:38
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3Â¥2013-12-26 12:58:32
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2Â¥: Originally posted by qxzhao88 at 2013-12-26 12:57:38
your ideal is welcome! i think guys will take part in your activity.

Yep it's less time-consuming than writing activity
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4Â¥2013-12-26 13:07:34
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3Â¥: Originally posted by kiss20085537 at 2013-12-26 12:58:32
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thanks mate.
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5Â¥2013-12-26 13:08:01
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5Â¥: Originally posted by Lopemann at 2013-12-26 13:08:01
thanks mate.

6Â¥2013-12-26 13:08:40
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Lopemann: ½ð±Ò+1, I believe your advice is constructive. 2013-12-26 17:44:28
curton: »ØÌûÖö¥ 2014-01-29 16:51:27
Your new activity is more time-saving, and I believe more emuch guys will participate it.  But one or two topics in a week will be enough I think.
7Â¥2013-12-26 17:33:24
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7Â¥: Originally posted by snowkelly at 2013-12-26 17:33:24
Your new activity is more time-saving, and I believe more emuch guys will participate it.  But one or two topics in a week will be enough I think.

Thanks for your feedback
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8Â¥2013-12-26 17:43:54
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curton: ½ð±Ò+1, I've noticed there are also many limitations of this activity coz sometimes it's better to write out the Chinese sentence first while Chinese is strictly prohibited here. 2014-01-29 16:51:36
In this activity, I really get some iimprovements, thank you for everthing!
9Â¥2013-12-27 17:40:44
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9Â¥: Originally posted by ²ËÄñ2012 at 2013-12-27 17:40:44
In this activity, I really get some iimprovements, thank you for everthing!

I've noticed there are also many limitations of this activity coz sometimes it's better to write out the Chinese sentence first while Chinese is strictly prohibited here.
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