24小时热门版块排行榜

返回列表

当前只显示满足指定条件的回帖，点击这里查看本话题的所有回帖

zhangwen3059

木虫 (正式写手)

应助: 0 (幼儿园)
金币: 2765.1
散金: 121
红花: 3
帖子: 964
在线: 829.7小时
虫号: 755535
注册: 2009-04-23
性别: GG
专业: 有机高分子功能材料

[求助] 请英语达人批改作文（考研八股文，）

目前正在准英语模板，自己写了一篇，模仿了不少句式，但不知道自己还有哪些地方
存在毛病，往英语达人，批点，建议。是去年考研的一篇看图作文。

   In spite of ‘endless talk of environment protection’,our world of nature is sill suffering pollutions，As we can see from the picture，while on a exciting tour with her boyfriend，a ‘beautiful’ girl pours a great number of things-such as fish-bones，banana peel and empty beer bottes，together with other junk-into a lake. Without being conscious that she is changing a ‘beautiful’ lake into a ‘dirty’ one，she enjoys herself thoroughly during the especially pleasant journey.
   Many people find such distasteful movements which are harmful to environment we live totally unacceptable. Yet in real life，through scientists in one wave after another try to awaken us to the growing threat of environmental degradation,most of us do little to improve the already overburdened nature resource.Moreover,our society now attaches so much emphasis on economic growth that few attentions are paid to the environment protection . Meanwhile,poor managements are set up for the protection of nature resource.
   The ecological system is ruining，and the development of economic is not far behind . To serve as responsible stewards of the planet,we must press forward on strengthening the average man’s awareness of environment protection.But awareness alone is inadequate,action should be followed. There is no doubt that if we could look after our earth as a baby,a wonderful nature full of fresh air,clean water would be presented in a few years.

[ Last edited by zhangwen3059 on 2011-11-17 at 18:42 ]

回复此楼

» 本帖@通知

@aman1987 @fjtony163 @五四青年 @Mally89 @mjlyxm @openmis @ringzhu

» 猜你喜欢

论文终于录用啦！满足毕业条件了已经有21人回复
不自信的我已经有5人回复
磺酰氟产物，毕不了业了！已经有4人回复
投稿Elsevier的杂志（返修），总是在选择OA和subscription界面被踢皮球已经有8人回复

» 本主题相关商家推荐: (我也要在这里推广)

» 本主题相关价值贴推荐，对您同样有帮助:

【重磅奖励】好消息！金属版第一届达人评选开始啦！已经有117人回复
有关2012csc申请的几个问题，请达人踊跃回答已经有21人回复
请教有经验的有机达人——过柱分离问题已经有10人回复
请英语达人帮忙把一篇中文摘要翻译成英文~急用~小弟不胜感激！(勿要使用翻译软件) 已经有2人回复
Springer中了，但交钱的时候迷糊了，达人指点一下已经有9人回复
请达人帮忙看一下，编辑如下的拒稿理由能否debate一下已经有6人回复
15金币请达人告知投稿图传送格式，有英文说明·！谢谢，在线等！已经有5人回复
达人帮忙汉译一下英啊，本人英语四级没过啊！全部金币。。已经有0人回复
请投过《Intermetallics》的达人多多指导已经有11人回复

算了，罢了，你以为我是闹剧也好，你以为我是幸福也好，关上门，各自有各自的幸福和眼泪。

1楼 2011-11-17 18:39:51

已阅回复此楼关注TA 给TA发消息送TA红花 TA的回帖

mjlyxm

银虫 (文坛精英)

外语EPI: 7
应助: 40 (小学生)
贵宾: 1.813
金币: 85.4
散金: 17896
红花: 94
沙发: 66
帖子: 13103
在线: 1036.9小时
虫号: 1406347
注册: 2011-09-18
专业: 生化分析及生物传感

【答案】应助回帖

★
ailing2023(金币+1): 感谢应助\(^o^)/~ 2011-11-17 21:36:46
zhangwen3059(金币+1): 我想把3）中movemens改成behaviors,是否会好点？ 2011-11-18 18:00:30

1)首先，瓶子是bottle不是botte
2)a ‘beautiful’ girl pours a great number of things-such as fish-bones，banana peel and empty beer bottes，together with other junk-into a lake我觉得可以改为a ‘beautiful’ girl is pouring a great deal of rubbish into a lake,such as fish-bones,banana peel,empty beer bottles and so on.
3)Many people find such distasteful movements which are harmful to the environment we live in totally is unacceptable.