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[½»Á÷] Writing Activity 1, December 4th to December 6th (Three articles available)

Guys I know English writing has become more and more an issue.

Having seen this, I want to run a series of writing activities for the following month.

Feel free to participate.

Just keep in mind.
No matter how much you read, how much you listen, if you never ever actually write something,
there is no way for you to write a good article in examination condition.

If you do not want to write anything but have the proofreading ability, you are also more than welcomed to pick up others' mistakes

All the writing activities will be put in a folder I made.
You can subscribe it if you want.
http://muchong.com/bbs/taotie.php?action=view&ttid=46562

After you finish writing this topic, please post your article here.
If I've got enough time, I can do some proofreading for you but it's not guaranteed.
I will highlight the articles I think highly of.  


Activity one:
Some people think the media should not report details of crimes to the public.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

[ Last edited by Lopemann on 2013-12-11 at 15:58 ]
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Lopemann: »ØÌûÖö¥ 2013-12-11 15:06:38
00waterh: ½ð±Ò+30, ESEPI+1, thanks for your revision,lope~ 2013-12-12 09:49:54
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16Â¥: Originally posted by ²ËÄñ2012 at 2013-12-10 14:40:19
Suddenly I realised the ablity to my writing is  a pupil level.
Really hope Lope can revise something, and give me some advice to me.
the below is my wirting.

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It is true that with the advent of information era, there comes a media information build-up including crime details. Many educators suggest that medium should withhold details of crimes to the public, and I personally hold the same opinion.

Of course crime details can help us better prepare for potential crimes. Most people are aware of crime on textbooks but still lack for the basic ability to identify crimes in real life. This is primarily due to the fact that when people are involved, they do not necessarily know how criminals operate the crime. More details can produce the largest likelihood for people to literally avoid crime in real life, and thus protect their own property and personal safety.  

Reporting details of crimes sometimes could sometimes undermine confidence of criminals in jail, and could pose damage to prisoners¡¯ future life. Being in jail itself is already a significant harm on both the criminal and his family. Crime detail reports always entail prisoner compulsory interviews which could potentially render prisons mentally-ill, and thus harm the prisoner and his family even further. If mental breakdowns ever occur, it is likely that in no way could the prisoner adapt to the society anymore.

The negative impact of crime details on the young is significant, which is not a problem to be treated lightly. For children who lived through the height of crime details without parental guide, they themselves could pick up coarse languages automatically from the event retrieval, or even become violent. Clearly what we want is not an increase of social unrest, but rather a reduction of harm to the public.

To conclude, despite that reporting crime details might bring us some benefits, I still think the negative impacts of doing so on the society overshadow the positive impacts.
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17Â¥2013-12-11 15:06:06
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tuqin2575

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You are a free teacher here. HAHA.
Befreeinyourway,justliketheshinninglighteveryday.
5Â¥2013-12-04 21:23:34
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5Â¥: Originally posted by tuqin2575 at 2013-12-04 21:23:34
You are a free teacher here. HAHA.

I should say I am a learner
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6Â¥2013-12-04 21:26:09
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Lope, I will write this writhing on Saturday night, please waiting for me
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