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[½»Á÷] Writing Activity 1, December 4th to December 6th (Three articles available)

Guys I know English writing has become more and more an issue.

Having seen this, I want to run a series of writing activities for the following month.

Feel free to participate.

Just keep in mind.
No matter how much you read, how much you listen, if you never ever actually write something,
there is no way for you to write a good article in examination condition.

If you do not want to write anything but have the proofreading ability, you are also more than welcomed to pick up others' mistakes

All the writing activities will be put in a folder I made.
You can subscribe it if you want.
http://muchong.com/bbs/taotie.php?action=view&ttid=46562

After you finish writing this topic, please post your article here.
If I've got enough time, I can do some proofreading for you but it's not guaranteed.
I will highlight the articles I think highly of.  


Activity one:
Some people think the media should not report details of crimes to the public.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

[ Last edited by Lopemann on 2013-12-11 at 15:58 ]
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5Â¥: Originally posted by tuqin2575 at 2013-12-04 21:23:34
You are a free teacher here. HAHA.

I should say I am a learner
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6Â¥2013-12-04 21:26:09
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7Â¥: Originally posted by ²ËÄñ2012 at 2013-12-05 18:57:40
Lope, I will write this writhing on Saturday night, please waiting for me

no problem

I might proceed to another topic as well.

Do you want me to post my writing prior to your finishing or not?
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8Â¥2013-12-05 19:36:41
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10Â¥: Originally posted by snowkelly at 2013-12-06 10:57:45

I will bring my articles soon, haha~

haha look forward to that!
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Lopemann: »ØÌûÖö¥ 2013-12-06 19:11:44
00waterh: ½ð±Ò+30, ESEPI+1, lope,it takes me more than ten minutes to scan your article,i must say that you have been my teacher. 2013-12-07 09:00:04
Alright, I am ready to post my article here.
Hope you guys have written up your own versions as well.
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We are living in a time when civil rights to know the truth clash with other objective factors necessary to be taken into consideration. In my opinion, details should be withheld by media workers and the government, for there are more drawbacks than the merits that the detailed reports may bring.

On the one hand, detailed reports may include something improper for kids that is the largest drawback those reports have, as they may pose bad effects on the young. They are known to include information about drug abuse, children abuse and somewhat like that, which is an overwhelming impact on teenagers. The young lack the basic ability to tell right from wrong, so they can be easily misled, and consequently go astray.

On the other hand, details of reporting those crimes may become an unknowing way to offer resources by which the criminals perfect their methods of committing crimes, thus resulting in even more crimes. In this case, a wide range of new ways of crimes come into being constantly, which has been already posing great obstacles to the police. As for criminals, therefore, the details of crimes could be a resource of achieving enlightenment. By learning from the details, those criminals can think up more sophisticated methods to commit crimes, which undoubtedly makes it harder for police to tackle, and which increases fear among the public.

To summarize, I don't think that details of crimes should be revealed, due to the fact that children may be misled and that criminals could study from them so much that they would do greater harm to the society and bring more fear to the public.

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Lopemann: »ØÌûÖö¥ 2013-12-07 09:12:15
00waterh: ½ð±Ò+30, ESEPI+1, I must say that again, i learn a lot from your article,lope. 2013-12-07 11:44:26
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13Â¥: Originally posted by snowkelly at 2013-12-06 22:33:04
Nowadays, information updates in the speed faster than we can receive. So does crime reports. There are many people holds the view that the media should not report details, because the teenagers need ...

In a time when changing mind is out of tone with overwhelming information intake, whether to report crime details has become more and more an issue. Despite the risk that crime details may mislead the youth, I still think reporting details does more good than bad.

The public have civil rights to know the truth, which is vitally important in modern society. If the government rejects our requests to know the truth and asks the media to be in line with it, then the public might question the government, for its operation is not transparent. Then we can assume that the government will get a lot of bad press, which could put the stability of the whole society in jeopardy because people no longer trust their government.

The youth might need some information intake to differentiate good from bad. When the youth step into the real world far from book knowledge, they are not equipped with basic capability to identify risk-taking behaviors if they have never encountered them before. Therefore, for these young people, crime behaviors can easily go unrecognized and they might also be involved.

In addition, the public can be better-prepared for potential crime behaviors if they know crime methods in detail. It is more likely for the public to think out coping strategies when they know more than they only know the basic framework. If the public only know the basic idea of crimes, it is true that they know how to distinguish crimes. However, they do not have any coping strategy in place to deal with crimes. In this way, when crimes come, the public are still ill-prepared.

To conclude, more details of crime should be revealed because it does more good than bad.

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Look forward to your article
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15Â¥2013-12-07 09:30:08
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Lopemann: »ØÌûÖö¥ 2013-12-11 15:06:38
00waterh: ½ð±Ò+30, ESEPI+1, thanks for your revision,lope~ 2013-12-12 09:49:54
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16Â¥: Originally posted by ²ËÄñ2012 at 2013-12-10 14:40:19
Suddenly I realised the ablity to my writing is  a pupil level.
Really hope Lope can revise something, and give me some advice to me.
the below is my wirting.

With the rise of technology, cellp ...

It is true that with the advent of information era, there comes a media information build-up including crime details. Many educators suggest that medium should withhold details of crimes to the public, and I personally hold the same opinion.

Of course crime details can help us better prepare for potential crimes. Most people are aware of crime on textbooks but still lack for the basic ability to identify crimes in real life. This is primarily due to the fact that when people are involved, they do not necessarily know how criminals operate the crime. More details can produce the largest likelihood for people to literally avoid crime in real life, and thus protect their own property and personal safety.  

Reporting details of crimes sometimes could sometimes undermine confidence of criminals in jail, and could pose damage to prisoners¡¯ future life. Being in jail itself is already a significant harm on both the criminal and his family. Crime detail reports always entail prisoner compulsory interviews which could potentially render prisons mentally-ill, and thus harm the prisoner and his family even further. If mental breakdowns ever occur, it is likely that in no way could the prisoner adapt to the society anymore.

The negative impact of crime details on the young is significant, which is not a problem to be treated lightly. For children who lived through the height of crime details without parental guide, they themselves could pick up coarse languages automatically from the event retrieval, or even become violent. Clearly what we want is not an increase of social unrest, but rather a reduction of harm to the public.

To conclude, despite that reporting crime details might bring us some benefits, I still think the negative impacts of doing so on the society overshadow the positive impacts.
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18Â¥: Originally posted by snowkelly at 2013-12-11 15:50:46
I find you are good at writing articles. After proofreading, this is definitely a good one in exam.
ps: I will continue to focus on your writing activity, and I think the topic or the articles sho ...

haha there is a bro anxiously preparing for TOEFL.

And according to my survey results, quite a few people come here for exams.
http://muchong.com/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=6572318
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20Â¥: Originally posted by snowkelly at 2013-12-11 16:08:33
But I still find 40% of the people surveyed come English cafe just because "I just like English"...

haha these people won't even pay a look to my writing activity, no matter what I write.
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