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[交流] 大家谁能帮我修改下这段话？

Fig. 1 shows the effect of microfiltration on permeate fluxes of UF for model whey solution.  It can be noticed that the permeate fluxes of MF whey are approximately double the whey feed fluxes. It is believed that microfiltration avoids contaminants deposited onto the UF membrane pores, which could reduces permeate flux.
这段话怎么修改一下才好呢？总是表达不清，请高人指点！
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1楼 2011-02-15 13:29:52
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qianye325326(金币+1): 2011-02-17 11:43:48
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Originally posted by qianye325326 at 2011-02-15 13:29:52:
Fig. 1 shows the effect of microfiltration on permeate fluxes of UF for model whey solution.  It can be noticed that the permeate fluxes of MF whey are approximately double the whey feed fluxes. It ...

首先这个图表是不清楚的
你需要用不同的line style和mark来画
不然你这个图很可能被编辑要求重画

不是很了解你的领域和专业术语
It is believed that microfiltration avoids contaminants deposited onto the UF membrane pores, which could reduces permeate flux.
我会改成
It is clear (如果你后面叙述的内容是从图中的出来的，而不是已经有的书本或者其他文献上的知识) that micorfiltration helps prevent possible contaminants deposited on UF membrane pores and thus increases permeate flux as shown in Fig xxx.

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3楼2011-02-17 03:08:21
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qianye325326(金币+1): 2011-02-17 11:43:54
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Originally posted by qianye325326 at 2011-02-14 22:29:52:
Fig. 1 shows the effect of microfiltration on permeate fluxes of UF for model whey solution.  It can be noticed that the permeate fluxes of MF whey are approximately double the whey feed fluxes. It ...

试验结果，要用过去时态描述。

这么大的gap应该是显著的，你的统计测验做了吗？p<0.05?如果是，我就替你用了significant。

结果应该很清楚，避免用approximately这样的词。你可以取个差值最大时候的点，说明那时候到底相差多少。比如20分钟后，差异最大，达到1.8倍之类的.

不知道你是写在results 里，还是discussion里。 看着用吧。

The significant differences in the permeate fluxes between MF pre-treated whey feed and control were observed, which lasted at least for 90mins(Fig.1). One possible explanation of such low amount of permeate fluxes in  MF pre-treated whey feed solution is that microfiltration may try to prevent contaminants from migrating into the pores of UF membrane.

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4楼2011-02-17 05:49:28
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5楼2011-02-17 11:44:41
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qianye325326(金币+1): 2011-02-18 10:10:55
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Originally posted by qianye325326 at 2011-02-15 13:29:52:
Fig. 1 shows the effect of microfiltration on permeate fluxes of UF for model whey solution.  It can be noticed that the permeate fluxes of MF whey are approximately double the whey feed fluxes. It ...

permeate改成permeation

The effect of microfiltration on permeate fluxes of UF for model whey solution is shown in Fig. 1, which shows that the permeation fluxes of MF whey are approximately double to that of the whey feed fluxes. The reduced permeation flux can be explianed according to the effect of  microfiltration by avoid contaminants deposited into the UF membrane pores.

根据你的意思，大体改了一下，不知道有没有改动你的意思
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6楼2011-02-17 12:26:36
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