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题目:Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
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   The archeaologists did discover the Palean baskets in Lithos which locates at the opposite side of the Brim River .Based on these limited evidence ,the writer conclude that the so-called Palean baskets is not uniquely Palean .We may accept part of the writer’s opinion ,however it is illogical and partial because some alternative explanation will weaken the argument .

  The passage gives the evidence that the Brim River is very deep and broad .Nevertheless the author has not mentioned sufficient information about the Brim river in ancient era .It is widely known that the natural characteristics always changes according to the geographic factors such as the climate ,glacier ,continent moving and etc. The Brim River could be rushed deeper and more broaden with time went by and its water quantity might has increased for 100 times since the ancient years .Maybe it was just a valet in the past .Without enough information being put , we can’t make the conclusion hastily.
  Accompanying with the query on the river , the statement that Paleans only could cross through the river by boats is apparently not convincing .Based on my first explanation , the boats might be not necessary for Paleans to get through the river .If the river was shallow and narrow at the ancient time ,the Paleand could cross it by foot or by primitive bridge. So the boats might be not compulsory.
Setting the query on the river and the method to cross the river aside , the wirer puts forwards the evidence that Palean baskets has been discovered by archeaologists in Lithos which stands on the opposite side of the Brim River from Palea. However , the question about how the baskets can be found in Lithos has been clarified .The unearth of baskets may be  not closely related to the facts that the Lithos had the skill or material to wove the baskets .In another word , they might trade for it with the Paleans ,if the paleans did  have the chance to cross the Brim river.
If we take all these aspects into consideration , it is not difficult fot us imaging that the Palean baskets might be uniquely made in Palea .The argument’s evidence is not completely persuasive to support speaker’s conclusion.  .
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The archeaologists indeed discovered the Palean baskets in Lithos which was located at the opposite side of the Brim River .Based on these limited evidences ,the writer concluded that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique for Palean. Though part of the authors' opinions can be reasonable, logically some alternative explanations may weaken this argument to some degree.
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2楼: Originally posted by chaowang3eg at 2014-03-30 06:40:04
The archeaologists indeed discovered the Palean baskets in Lithos which was located at the opposite side of the Brim River .Based on these limited evidences ,the writer concluded that the so-called P ...

没有什么建议么?
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1016828262: 金币+5 2014-04-02 22:28:23
benovence: 金币+2, 谢谢参与 2014-05-15 08:14:46
今天太忙,抽时间仔细看。我给你提几个小建议。

1、首先arguement是限时考试,你在考场上时间有限,速度和质量都很重要。
2、注意标点和换行。
3、注意时态。
4、注意说话简洁,不要重复过多。例如第一段的最后一句就是典型的重复。

有时间再细说。
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4楼: Originally posted by tianya0423 at 2014-04-02 21:02:33
今天太忙,抽时间仔细看。我给你提几个小建议。

1、首先arguement是限时考试,你在考场上时间有限,速度和质量都很重要。
2、注意标点和换行。
3、注意时态。
4、注意说话简洁,不要重复过多。例如第一段的最 ...

好吧等你有时间再看,金币少,麻烦了。
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1016828262: 金币+5 2014-05-03 08:08:03
mark一下,以后有时间再看
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6楼: Originally posted by ABCDEFG! at 2014-05-02 21:51:31
mark一下,以后有时间再看

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benovence: 金币+2, 谢谢参与 2014-05-28 08:25:45
抱歉回复的晚了,前段时间是期末考试,比较忙。

附件是修改的版本,使用的是MS WORD的review 功能,如果不习惯请给我说。

http://pan.baidu.com/s/1eQCEvS2
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9楼: Originally posted by tianya0423 at 2014-05-15 03:56:15
抱歉回复的晚了,前段时间是期末考试,比较忙。

附件是修改的版本,使用的是MS WORD的review 功能,如果不习惯请给我说。

http://pan.baidu.com/s/1eQCEvS2

那个链接点开后说的是“访问界面不存在”。要不我给你个邮箱吧。
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