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The film deposited at 350°C has a stronger (222) diffraction peak and a sharp (211) peak, the average grain size and transmission peak intensity (89.79%) of the film increases.
这样写 符合英语习惯么,头重脚轻吧 怎么 修改一下啊 谢谢
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8814402(金币+1): 谢谢应助 2011-08-04 11:20:49
the average grain size and transmission peak intensity (89.79%) increases as the film deposited at 350°C has a stronger (222) diffraction peak and a sharp (211) peak。仅供参考!
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爱与雨下(金币+1): 欢迎常来 2011-08-05 08:41:16
sltmac(金币+2): 应助很详细,多加2BB 2011-08-07 10:06:05
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sltmac(金币+15, 翻译EPI+1): 感谢应助,欢迎常来 2011-08-10 09:50:46
sltmac(金币+15, 翻译EPI+1): 感谢应助,欢迎常来 2011-08-10 09:50:48
sltmac(金币+15, 翻译EPI+1): 感谢应助,欢迎常来 2011-08-10 09:50:52
不知道diffraction peak , the average grain size and transmission peak intensity 三者是否有因果关系?如果你仅仅是想用平行的方法刻画这三个属性的变化,那么你可以如下表达:
The film deposited at 350°C has a strong (222) diffraction peak, a sharp (211) peak (这个是什么peak,也是diffraction peak吗?), and an increased transmission peak intensity (89.79%). Measurement shows the average grain size of its deposit is xxx.

如果要与某种Film比较,则可以为:Compared to film A, the  film deposited at 350°C has a stronger (222) diffraction peak (xx% increment), an increased transmission peak intensity (89.79%), and larger average grain size of its deposit (yy% increment).

不理解a sharp (211) peak 的关系,所以没有放进去,只有你才懂的

注意两点:
1)除非你有比较,不然不要用比较级;如果你用比较级,则平行的成分都用比较级:stronger 对应 sharper.
2)尽量用简单句。
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