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8569636.hi

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[交流] 请问这句话有语病吗?

请问这句话有语病吗?
Based on above three considerations, Figures 6 and 7 show size-dependent point depression versus reciprocal particle diameter for Al and Bi nanoparticles in comparison to available experimental results, respectively.

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zerohead

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thanks

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cfk580713

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发芽土豆(金币+1):谢谢参与 2010-07-10 13:38:05
8569636.hi(金币+1, 翻译EPI+1):谢谢! 2010-07-11 08:02:22
不知道具体的语境哈 这样写不知道是否改变了原意
Based on the three considerations mentioned above, experimental results shown in Figures 6 and 7 reveal size-dependent point depression versus reciprocal particle diameter for Al and Bi nanoparticles, respectively.
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zerohead

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发芽土豆(金币+1):谢谢参与 2010-07-10 13:38:12
8569636.hi(金币+2):谢谢! 2010-07-11 08:02:54
well, you may have a few points to say, but that's not good to make such a long sentence, especially the arrangement is not appropriate. besides, your meaning is not clear, "based on some considersation" then you need to "compare with some experimental results", which one is the major consideration? so I would suggest you to make it into some simple sentences first, then combine them if you feel necessarily.
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Originally posted by cfk580713 at 2010-07-10 11:21:44:
不知道具体的语境哈 这样写不知道是否改变了原意
Based on the three considerations mentioned above, experimental results shown in Figures 6 and 7 reveal size-dependent point depression versus recipro ...

语境是这样的:
To investigate effect of the bulk experimental values on the melting point depression, we take into account three factors that affect the melting point of nanostructured materials according to Eqs. (2) - (10):
(a) neglecting the temperature dependence of surface free energy alone, i.e. assuming constant surface free energy as most researchers do;
(b) neglecting the temperature dependence of molar volume alone;
(c) assuming equal molar volume for solid and liquid as Kim et al. do.
    Based on above three considerations, Figures 6 and 7 show.....
请问我这样表述可以吗?
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