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[交流] 写糊涂了,那个句子更好?

马上要上传修改稿了,可是总觉得这个句子写的不好。以下哪个句子更好?还是另辟新句呢?

1. The height of these nanostructures increases rapidly at first and then increases slowly with the increasing normal load or number of scratching cycles.

2. With the increasing normal load or number of scratching cycles, the height of these nanostructures increases rapidly at first and then increases slowly.

3. With the increasing normal load or number of scratching cycles, the height of these nanostructures increases rapidly at first and then slowly.

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都行吧,with the increasing normal load or number of scratching cycles这是状语,前置后置不影响句子的意思
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With the increasing of normal load or number of scratching cycles, the heights of these nanostructures increased first rapidly and then slowly.
3楼2009-09-12 11:02:26
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With the increasing normal load or number of scratching cycles, the height of these nanostructures increases rapidly at first and then increases slowly.
4楼2009-09-12 13:46:34
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这个句子的关键在两个动词increases是否全部保留,我想用 With the increasing normal load or number of scratching cycles, the height of these nanostructures increases rapidly at first and then slowly.
但是and后面没有动词,行不?
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Originally posted by xinyunsina at 2009-9-12 11:02:
With the increasing of normal load or number of scratching cycles, the heights of these nanostructures increased first rapidly and then slowly.

我觉得这个比较好些
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With the increasing normal load or number of scratching cycles, the heights of these nanostructures increased first rapidly and then slowly.
我也觉得这个句子更顺畅,不啰嗦。

但一个哥们说and后面没有increases,是错误的

我想去掉increases是省略,应该没有问题吧?!

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Originally posted by xinyunsina at 2009-9-12 11:02:
With the increasing of normal load or number of scratching cycles, the heights of these nanostructures increased first rapidly and then slowly.

With the increasing of normal...
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with the increase of 更好些,否则不通
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