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rainbow0711

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[求助] 研一小白 刚写的作文 求大神修改错误

A  White Lie
When I read a story about mother's love ,I will recall something on my best friend. my best friend,li  zheng,has been living a happy life before I was in grade three senior high school, but everything changed since his father passed away four year ago.
I was shocked when I heard the news of partner's father's death. Because uncle li was very well while I met him two weeks ago.  My partner's mother is a laid-off worker, so his family's life  was more poor because of his father's death. With the coming of the college entrance examination ,his mother decided not to let him know about it. All friend and relatives of him act as if nothing happened and we quietly held a funeral. In his absence,his mother was in tears and three jobs. Until the end of the university entrance examination he didn't really know the lie. Although he is unlucky,he  didn't  give up the dream of university because of the influence of his father's death . In order to reduce the burden of mom,he did a part-time job. Now he has successfully completed the college.
Sometimes a lie is necessary and good. From this thing,I know mother's give us hope to overcome difficulties and is very great.
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2楼: Originally posted by 1616albb at 2013-09-21 15:20:31
姐姐,我觉得你这个文章得好好改改

是得好好改改,阿姨说得对

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姐姐,我觉得你这个文章得好好改改

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3楼: Originally posted by inpure at 2013-09-21 15:31:16
是得好好改改,阿姨说得对
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我第一次上小木虫,因为我现在大二,年纪应该比楼主小,叫姐姐真的只是出于礼貌的叫法,如果大家觉得这样子叫不爽的话,我知道了,以后叫同学就是了,我是一个知错能改的人,有什么不对,请指出,我会跟虚心地接受,但是请路过的留点口德

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4楼: Originally posted by 1616albb at 2013-09-21 15:44:31
我第一次上小木虫,因为我现在大二,年纪应该比楼主小,叫姐姐真的只是出于礼貌的叫法,如果大家觉得这样子叫不爽的话,我知道了,以后叫同学就是了,我是一个知错能改的人,有什么不对,请指出,我会跟虚心地接受 ...

真没劲

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