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求大神们修改托福作文啊
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**Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The environmental issue is too complex to be handled by the individual. My: Nowadays,as the quick development of the economic,there are also increasing environmetal problems.More and more news on TV or newspaper are about the serious pollutions,it seems that we are surround by the mountians of pollutions,and it seems that the environmental pollutions are too complex to handle by individual.However,as for me,I don't think so,I don't think there are much too complex enviromental problems and as one individual ,we are also can cope with the problems that around us easily and efficiently. Modern medias are more popular than the past years,lots of medias compete on the world,and it seems that no other big news they can take on,everyday,they just put on the news of environmental pollutions,such as one industry has pollutioned one local river ,some farm areas are poisoned by the ejections of the local industries.So many negtive reports are filled in the TV,newspaper,and Internet.Sometimes they just exaggrate a small problem,but most time,their reports cause a lot of people to anxious of their life. Therefore,I want to say is that in our life ,in most occasion,there are just some small pollutions,everyone can handle it. we are obessed with the big problem that may not in our life,so we maybe not aware of these small issues,such as noise pollution,light pollution,and garbiage pollution.These problems are not big deals,we can easily handle them.when we find the constrution area is buliding at night and it's noise annoy us,we can just go there and stop them,if they still do that,we can take them in court.and,the garbiage pollution is easier.we can talk to somebody who throw useless things arbitrary,we talk to them our ability.Of course,we should do first as an example. Now that the problems are not big as we think about and we all can handle them easily,why not we move up and to do something for the environment ,for ourselvers,for our descends |
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