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TOPIC: ISSUE41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
WORDS: 540

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1、非主流研究领域角色的重要性取决于主流科学的发展程度
2、评价非主流研究领域在社会中扮演的角色重要与否取决于是否积极去影响人们
3、某些非主流研究领域满足了一小部分人们的好奇心,因此在社会上还是扮演了较为重要的角色
1. The role of nonmainstream areas of inquiry is based on the level of progress in mainstream science.
2. How to evaluate the role of nonmainstream areas of inquiry relied on whether it influence human beings positively or negatively.
3. Some nonmainstream areas of inquiry could be a special role in society since they can satisfy a part of human's curiosity sometimes.
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With brilliant achivements of mainstream science, there are still uncultured areas which could be filled with such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits. Considering this point, some people would maintain that nonmainstream areas of inquiry play a vital role in society since they could satisfy human needs that are not researched by mainstream science by now. But as a considerable part of our life, nonmainstream areas could influence a little people but lose their might in facing to the whole world.

To begin with, the role of nonmainstream areas of inquiry is based on the level of progress in mainstream science. Admittedly, such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astology, fortune-telling are popular in ancientry. The ancients found some nature phenomenons related with the movement of stars but they could not give a scientific explain. Astrology played a vital role for its reasonable explain about those phenomenons. However, with the heliocentric theory by Copernicus, the laws of planetary motion by Kepler, and then the law of gravity by Newton, astronomy gradually push the astrology to the edge of society. As results, mainstream sciences like astronomy play an important role in society for their great progress in most research fields. Obviously, we could not conclude simply that nonmainstream areas of inquiry play a vital role in modern society which its technology is being a high level.

On the other hand, how to evaluate the role of nonmainstream areas of inquiry relied on whether it influence human beings positively or negatively. Although some nonmainsteam areas of inquiry could meet human needs in psychological level, lots of them would make people lose their positive aspiration, addict themselves to fantasy or other negative effections. Taking fortune-telling as an example, some people who believed it would daydream all day and all night but not took their efforts if it foretold their well future, in turn, they could be waiting to the bad fate since they convinced the curse by foreteller. However, lots of people who definitely doubt fortune-telling would consider it blank lies. How could we assert that such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as fortune-telling play a vital role in our mordern society while they gave people negative attitudes?

However, we should take a glance that some nonmainstream areas of inquiry could be a special role in our society since they can satisfy a part of human's curiosity or other needs sometimes. Mainstream science keeps going on its progress, but there are always unknown fields in any time. People have a nature that they keep the stong curiosity on any unknown fields. So people would seek answers, which mainstream science cannot explain, in such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling or others. In this point of view, nonmainstream areas of inquiry could be a limited role sometimes because unknown areas is less and less with the progress of mainstream science.

In sum, from what has been discussed above, we can draw a conclusion that nonmainstream areas of inquiry played a vital role in society which science was undeveloped, but lost their might gradually with magic progress of science in recent centuries. In other words, mainstream science built a solid status which it play a vital role in society today.
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TOPIC: ISSUE41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
WORDS: 540
研究界的一些非主流领域,比如星相学、占卜术和意念和超自然探索,在社会中起到了很重要得作用,因为他们满足了人们无法从主流科学获得的需求。
属于少数和多数之非主流学科。
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1、非主流研究领域角色的重要性取决于主流科学的发展程度
2、评价非主流研究领域在社会中扮演的角色重要与否取决于是否积极去影响人们
3、某些非主流研究领域满足了一小部分人们的好奇心,因此在社会上还是扮演了较为重要的角色
1. The role of nonmainstream areas of inquiry is based on the level of progress in mainstream science.
2. How to evaluate the role of nonmainstream areas of inquiry relied on whether it influences human beings positively or negatively.
3. Some nonmainstream areas of inquiry could be a special role in society since they can satisfy a part of human's curiosity sometimes.
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With brilliant achievements(注意拼写) of mainstream science, there are still uncultured areas which could be filled with such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits. Considering this point, some people would maintain that nonmainstream areas of inquiry play a vital role in society since they could satisfy human needs that are not researched by mainstream science by now. But as a considerable part of our life, nonmainstream areas could influence a little people but lose there might in facing to the whole world.(提纲看来你的position是完全agree题目的意思,第一段你却又流露出了part agree的意味,注意写文章首先要选好一个position,先定位再写)

To begin with; the role of nonmainstream areas of inquiry is based on the level of progress in mainstream science. Admittedly, such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology(注意单词拼写), fortune-telling are popular in ancientry. The ancients found some nature phenomenon(现象是不可数单词) related with the movement of stars but they could not give a scientific explain. Astrology played a vital role for it’s reasonable explains(注意时态) about those phenomenon. However, with the heliocentric theory by Copernicus, the laws of planetary motion by Kepler, and then the law of gravity by Newton, astronomy gradually push the astrology to the edge of society. As results, mainstream sciences like astronomy play an important role in society for their great progress in most research fields. Obviously, we could not conclude simply that nonmainstream areas of inquiry play a vital role in modern society that(which 删)its technology is being a high level.

On the other hand, how to evaluate the role of nonmainstream areas of inquiry relied on whether it influences (注意句子的时态)human beings positively or negatively. Although some nonmainsteam areas of inquiry could meet human needs in psychological level, lots of them would make people lose their positive aspiration, addict themselves to fantasy or other negative effections. Taking fortune-telling as an example, some people who believed it would daydream all day and all night but not took their efforts if it foretold their well future, in turn, they could be waiting to the bad fate since they convinced the curse by foreteller. However, lots of people who definitely doubt fortune-telling would consider it blank lies. How could we assert that such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as fortune-telling play a vital role in our modern(注意单词拼写) society while they gave people negative attitudes?(算命跟主流科学有什么关系么?本段只写了算命的坏处,建议加点主流科学可以驳倒算命术的地方)

However, we should take a glance that some nonmainstream areas of inquiry could be a special role in our society since they can satisfy a part of human's curiosity or other needs sometimes. Mainstream science keeps going on its progress, but there are always unknown fields in any time. People have a nature that they keep the strong(注意单词拼写) curiosity on any unknown fields. So people would seek answers, which mainstream science cannot explain, in such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling or others? (注意标点的使用)In this point of view, nonmainstream areas of inquiry could be a limited role sometimes because unknown areas is less and less with the progress of mainstream science.

In sum, from what has been discussed above, we can draw a conclusion that nonmainstream areas of inquiry played a vital role in society which science was undeveloped, but lost their might gradually with magic progress of science in recent centuries. In other words, mainstream science built a solid status that(which删) it play a vital role in society today.(看到结尾你的文章的position是disagree,跟开头段表述的立场有所出入)
本章比以前几篇大有进步,需注意把低级错误控制在三个以下。

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