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shirongjiu

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[交流] 【Activity】Faults-finding activity No. 2 已有7人参与

Both translators and polishers tend to overlook constructions of sentences with unnecessary verbs, because they are grammatically correct and because-precisely-everyone is so accustomed to them. Here are some examples, would you like to find the unnecessary verbs and try to perfect the sentences?

1) we must make an improvement in our work.
2) It is impossible for us to accomplish the transformation of the whole society overnight.
3) We should conduct a careful examination of the computer.
4) We should try to bring about a change in this state of affairs.
5) They must make up their minds to implement the reform of the current system.


I really appreciate all the friends' attention here. Till now, we have got the right answer, and the faults-finding activity No. 2 is over. Later on, I will post other sentences for perfection. Looking forward to seeing you all!

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linzhiabc

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shirongjiu(金币+2):bingo! 2010-05-07 13:41:20
1---we must  improve  our work.
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shirongjiu(金币+2):well done!!! The sentence seems concise without being unclear. 2010-05-07 13:51:24
  2) It is impossible for us to  transform of the whole society overnight.
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shirongjiu(金币+6):wow! 2010-05-07 14:02:41
I tried.

1) we must improve our work.
2) It is impossible for us to transform the whole society overnight.
3) We should examine the computer carefully.
4) We should have a change  in this state of affairs.
5) They must make up their minds to reform the current system.
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fangye0413(金币+2):(*^__^*) …… 2010-05-07 20:29:09
shirongjiu(金币+2):yes! tjat is right! thank you!! 2010-05-08 06:37:45
I agree with xia-chong ,however,in my opinion ,
4)We should change this state of affairs.
maybe better?
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shirongjiu(金币+2):well done! 2010-05-08 06:38:28
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Originally posted by linzhiabc at 2010-05-07 13:43:52:
  2) It is impossible for us to  transform of the whole society overnight.

the word "of" is excess.
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shirongjiu(金币+1):it is ok,man! 2010-05-08 06:38:52
i'm sorry, i'm english is very poor, so it is very difficult for me to find faults from the sentences you provide.
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fangye0413(金币+1):Welcome~ 2010-05-08 09:07:16
3rd floor answered it so overall . So I just come here for learning!
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Originally posted by lppv at 2010-05-07 20:23:49:

the word "of" is excess.

yeah,thank you!
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shirongjiu(金币+2):great 2010-05-08 20:53:15
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