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[交流] IELTS剑5Test1小作文随笔,欢迎各位虫友指正!

题目是关于日本、瑞典和美国65岁以上人口比例变化的曲线图,下面是我写的作文:



The graph illustrates the changes of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in Japan, Sweden and USA.
The population of the over-65-years old in Japan is predicted to constitute the highest proportion, at 27%, followed by Sweden (25%) and USA (24%). Before the 21st Century, the over-65-years old in Japan take for a significantly lower proportion, fluctuating between 3% and 5%. Then, probably, the next four decades will see a notable increase, with 7% at 2010 to 27% at 2040.
Unlikely, the proportion for USA and Sweden experience a steady increase over 1940 to 2040. The figures for USA and Sweden are about 7% at 1940, and will not lag behind Japan until 2030 (intersect at 18%). USA has a higher proportion than that in Sweden until late 1990s, when a rapid increase appears in Sweden and thus exceeds USA.
It is shown that all the proportions of the over-65-years old in three countries are likely to rise considerably over the century. This trend may continue in the next decades without any measurements.


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