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[交流] I am just starting to record my life here, in France, Marseille, Provence

Hello, guys
It is the last day of June of 2015, and it is the end of the 21th month of my life here in Marseille.
Time is flying silently but quickly.  It seemed that there is a thief who stole it from my life.
During these two years, there were so many stories, full of joys and sorrows.  Too many to remember for me.
Today an opinion occurred in my mind that why not write the stories down.
Write it down to remind myself that how I survived my first year here, when my ex-girlfriend broke relations with me.
Write it down to remind myself that how I managed to conquer the loneliness here, with so many strange people with strange English accents around.
Write it down to remind myself that how I turned my attitudes towards France, from being scared, to hate, while finally, to be love.
And also, write it down to share it with you, my friends.
To get the feedback from you, to communicate with you, to exchange opinions on life and dreams.
And of course, if possible, to find my Missright, with a common language with me, to enjoy or endure the life, with me.
So here we go.
Good luck to everybody and please wait for my everyday diary and feel free to comment.
Yours,
Allen
30/06/2015  13:57
Marselle
France
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Today an opinion occurred in my mind that why not write the stories down.

Somehow I feel this sentence is not English enough.

It may be better by saying:

Today it comes to me that why not write them out.
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3楼: Originally posted by 木月王子 at 2015-06-30 21:26:21
Today an opinion occurred in my mind that why not write the stories down.

Somehow I feel this sentence is not English enough.

It may be better by saying:

Today it comes to me that why not w ...

great correction.
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4楼: Originally posted by zhaoyun2012 at 2015-06-30 22:17:27
great correction....

Thanks! I am not native speaker but I try to be.

"when my ex-girlfriend broke relations with me."  "broke relations with me" appears strange. Is it a little bit more comfortable if we say:"broke away from me?"

"I turned my attitudes towards France, from being scared, to hate, while finally, to be love."

This one can be improved if we use"evolve"

How I evolved from resisting, fearing and hating France to accepting, loving and enjoying.  

I prefer "evolve" because it has something positive with it.

If I offende you, please forgive me.
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5楼: Originally posted by 木月王子 at 2015-06-30 23:05:54
Thanks! I am not native speaker but I try to be.

"when my ex-girlfriend broke relations with me."  "broke relations with me" appears strange. Is it a little bit more comforta ...

No, you did not offend me at all.  In contrast, I like your comment because it is quite useful for me to improve.  ''evolve"" is great to express this point, and I really like the words''resisting''''fearing''''accepting''.   However, I would like to replace the phrase ''broke relations with me'' with '' broke up with me''.  It is better I think.  What do you think about it?
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4楼: Originally posted by zhaoyun2012 at 2015-06-30 22:17:27
great correction....

As to this point, I prefer to modify it to be'' an idea occurs to me''
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6楼: Originally posted by zhaoyun2012 at 2015-06-30 23:56:01
No, you did not offend me at all.  In contrast, I like your comment because it is quite useful for me to improve.  ''evolve"" is great to express this point, and I really like the words''r ...

"break up" may be the most common word used. I think it's fine here. I checked the dictionary, in fact, it dose not really have the meaning you would like to express. However, it can convey such emotion. I think it is fine.
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7楼: Originally posted by zhaoyun2012 at 2015-07-01 00:10:05
As to this point, I prefer to modify it to be'' an idea occurs to me''...

yeah!
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thanks for your sharing, you are very brave to live a good life in a foreign country., especially, when you broke up with your EX. I am looking forward to your next diary.
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