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hefuan

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麻烦修改一下下面的一段话,看看哪里有语病或是不通顺的。最好能整段重新写一下。
As technology developing rapidly, the decrease in both size and power consumption of digital products opens up the possibility to make them as wearable devices in which digital systems are integrated in everyday personal belongings such as clothes. However, being the power source used in wearable devices, the traditional batteries have big size and need to replace or recharge them periodically.
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with the rapid development of the modern technology, both size and power consumption of digital products decreases and opens up the possibility to make them as wearable devices in which digital systems are integrated in some personal belongings such as clothes.However, being the power source used in wearable devices, the traditional batteries have bigger size and need to  be replaced or recharged  periodically. 这样地道一点
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both size and power consumption of digital products decreases and opens up the possibility to make them as wearable devices 中是不是decreases and opens 的主语不该是一个啊,能用and连接吗?
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谢谢楼上,用个which代替and
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