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[交流] my diary since June 6

today is june 6,it is a sunny day. all days here are sunny.last sunday,i went to fishing ,i just got 2 small fishs .but my colleagues gave me some ,that i had a nice fish dinner.my sweat husband laugh at me for my bad technology of fishing .i admit .you know ,when i was fishing ,i remind of the scene of the fishing part of the father and son .the father whispered ,send me fish .send me fish .so i couldn't help me say the same words .that is a interesting thing ,isn't it?
it is 3 p.m. when i came back.my sweetie was having noon snap .after i fix up  the fish,i took a bath .then jump into the bed .get ready to have a rest with my husband . i woke up until 6 p.m. as my old sister-in-law said that we can have a fish dinner together if i take fish back .so i woke up my sweetie ,take the fish to my sister Yan 's home.she cook the dishes ,and i prepare the food materials. as the cooperation ,we started dinner sooner .what a nice together ,we all have fun that evening .i praised Yan for her excellent work.and she was happy too.
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好像语法错误不少
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4楼2013-06-06 19:31:51
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4楼: Originally posted by august9009 at 2013-06-06 19:31:51
好像语法错误不少

can you point them out for me?i think that maybe a improvement for us .you can practise  the grammar,and i can learn from you .any way ,thank you.
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august9009

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I try to rewrite it as follows.
Today is June 6, a sunny day. Recent days we have been enjoying the sunshine. I'd like to go outings in such good days.
Last sunday we went fishing with my friends.  As a green hand, to be frank, i had no idea with fishing skills and got only two small fishes. Fortunately my friends  gave me some, with which i could cook a good meal.  Thanks for the sharing. However, what annoyed me in this fishing was the interruption from my families.  He whispered, laughing at my skills, and kept making me angry with  some words. So how could i get a good  fishing.
It's 3 o'clock pm when we came back after fishing. As usual, my  husband went to have a nap.  But i had to deal with these fishes. After that i took a shower and then had a rest.  I was so tired and kept sleeping until 6 p.m. when Ms. Yan, my sister-in-law called me. She suggested to have a fish dinner with us. So great for me that she helped in cooking.  I woke up my husband. And we took these fishes to go to Ms. Yan's apartment.   
We had cooking together very well.  I prepared food materials and she cooked the fished. Because of good cooperation, we had the dinner prepared very soon.  I enjoyed the meal, chatting and praising Ms. Yan for her fantastic cooking. We all had fun during that night.  What a nice family dinner.

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