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15Â¥: Originally posted by ·ÏÂÖñÁÖ at 2013-05-17 10:17:54
thank you,would you mind to point out.so i can avoid it the next time...

Nothing special today, the main melody of today was rainy ,cold and boring. I have slept in bed all day.
      I gave one day to myself to relax and forget something(unhappy). So, the lazy side of mine took over my life.
      Eh, nothing special, but boring.

The main problem are the spelling mistakes ,tenses and capitalization matters. I have revised and highlighted the possible mistakes with red color.
Anyhow, you really did a good job! Hoping for your more great postings.

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21Â¥: Originally posted by °¢·É1990¹Ô¹Ô at 2013-05-17 14:03:25
Nothing special today, the main melody of today was rainy ,cold and boring. I have slept in bed all day.
      I gave one day to myself to relax and forget something(unhappy). So, the lazy sid ...

thank you.i will pay more attention to them
22Â¥2013-05-17 16:01:40
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