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作文题目：Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Several days ago, when my classmates and I were preparing the test of IBT, I found the truth that different ones did make different choices between studying alone and studying together. Those students who tend to study by themselves suppose independence and the circumstance free of interruption is the key point to improve the efficiency of study. Remarkable though the advantages are, I believe, they can not compete with the benefits which are obtained from reciprocal help and encouragement in a study group, when we consider the difficulty of subjects we study.

First of all, never do I reckon knowledge is easy to gain, and the advantage of teamwork to surmount handicaps is apparent. Therefore I prefer to dealing with issues of study with others. When I was a freshman, mathematic was a deadly weak point of me and then I took part in a mathematic group in my university. Discussions of elusive subjects as well as the merits of each other were helpful for me to comprehend those mathematic principles and refine my learning method. Eventually, not only did I pass the final exam, but also got an award in a mathematic compete. It would be incredible if I did without mutual help.

Moreover, the mental incentives from the other ones is a crucial aspect for a person to be succeed, and naturally the success in study is not a exception. For instance, when someones encounter some setbacks in study such as failure in routine tests and lack of time to carry on, and hesitate over the choice between holding on or giving up their subject, their classmates with them will probably encourage them to recover self-confidence and give them some constructive advice.

Admittedly, striving for knowledge alone means less bother from surrounding and more opportunity to form independent attitude. There are also a lot of examples of great persons that they achieve goals of lives just by self-study such as Abraham Lincoln. However, people like Lincoln are the minority of society, and it is obviously difficult to copy his achievement by common people just like us. And what is more, I deem Lincoln would initiate his political career without many setbacks resulted from lack of education, if he had more chances to study with others.

As far as I know, a increasing number of students are aware of that the advantages of group study overweight those of study alone and choose to join some interest groups for mutual aid in study. Coincident with the opinion of many people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that students should study together with classmates.

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keyares(金币+15): 2010-11-20 15:24:57
只看了第一段 楼主英文功底还不错 但写作习惯和技巧还需要改善

when I and my classmates were 改成my classmates and I 后面也是 I要放在别人后面

These students who tend to studying 中these改成those， studying改成study

I believe, they can not compete with the benefits that I and my partners can obtain reciprocal help and encouragement from each other, when we consider the difficulty of subjects we study.这句很有问题 I和my partners换位，that从句建议改成compete with the reciprocal benefits that my partners and I can obtain from group study, especially when the subjects are quite difficult.

ps 我雅思作文7.5，GRE作文5分 楼主应该可以信赖 呵呵

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keyares(金币+5):呵呵，这个问题不大，在口语里面介绍他人的时候注意的比较多。 2010-11-19 21:24:39
……第一句， I and my classmates 似乎应该后说自己……就看了一句……继续看，占沙发……
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devotionzc

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keyares(金币+20):thanks！ 2010-11-19 23:02:52
版主真大方啊，一下给我5个金币！！！

There are a lot of examples that people achieve their goals of life As far as I know, there are an increasing number of student

整体论点不错啊，用词什么的也还好，不过我英语也一般，找个英语好的改改当范文应该没问题，最后结尾段多一点就好了……
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devotionzc

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还有些单复数什么的，不过那些指出来意义不大，还是让强人改吧,嘿嘿，加油加油
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