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螺旋藻

木虫 (正式写手)

[交流] [小学三年级英语作文修改]非常感谢!

A HAPPY DAY

     One Sunday morning, my father, my mother and I went to the X Park by car. After we came to the garden, we can see many flowers, red flowers, yellow flowers and white flowers. Some butterflies were playing and dancing up and down. Some birds were singing sweetly. Then we went to the zoo. In the zoo, we can see many animals, like tigers, panda, zebras and monkeys. The baby elephant named “xixi” was very lovely. Suddenly I saw my classmate Zhao  Qin. I said: “How nice to meet you”.
      When it was 12 o’clock, I was hungry. We went to KFC. I like to eat Hamburg, hotdog and ice cream. We had a good lunch. On afternoon, I asked “Can we go to the supermarket?” Dad said “ok”. In the supermarket, we bought many fruits and food. I brought a T-shirt, It looks very smart.
     When I was tired, I said “Let’s go home”.
     I had a happy day.
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zhujiumei

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螺旋藻(金币+1,VIP+0):新年快乐! 1-1 15:53
can see many 改成 see some
7楼2009-12-20 15:16:54
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skyerhy

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螺旋藻(金币+1,VIP+0):xiexie ! 12-20 15:03
小学三年级人写的?比我当年强多了
新年愿望:1.拿到国家自然科学基金青年基金!2.关心我的人和我关心的人这一年都平平安安、顺顺利利!
2楼2009-12-20 15:01:38
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螺旋藻

木虫 (正式写手)

不要意思!是他老爸写的,怕错,希望大伙批评指正

希望大伙批评指正!
3楼2009-12-20 15:04:07
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闻筝雪舞

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不用改了  很不错了 再改就有点假了
君子当存含垢纳污之量,不可持好洁独行之操。
4楼2009-12-20 15:05:30
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