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大神们帮我改一下，不要标准答案，拜托了
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| " Tea or coffee? " is a question that is often asked by dinner-eaters. Many western people may choose coffee, while Chinese people could choose tea. As is said that an emperor of China discovered tea and used it to cure diseases. During the Ming and Qing Dynasties, tea houses spred around our country. Tea drinking spred into Japan in the sixth century, but it didn't spred into Europe and America until the 18 century. Today, tea is one of the most popular drinks all over the world. Tea is the most important things of China and the important component of Chinese tradition and culture. |
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叶凌宇轩: 金币+25, ★★★很有帮助 2016-11-30 22:35:14
叶凌宇轩: 金币+25, ★★★很有帮助 2016-11-30 22:35:14
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先把逻辑理顺了再弄语言吧，确实如楼上所说，表达太过于中式。先看逻辑 1. asked by dinner-eaters？？？你确定是吃的人问（当然这个dinner-eaters表达也很吓人啊） 2. As is said that an emperor of China discovered tea。。。。。。 spred around our country（第三旁观者变成了第一人称） 3. tea houses spred 。。。。。。Tea drinking spred 。。。。。。 tea is。。。。 典型中式表达： dinner-eaters， Tea drinking Tea is the most important things 先把这些改掉，其他的毛病是句子和语法的问题，自己小心一点大概能改对 |
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