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Originally posted by zhenmafudan at 2008-12-31 07:43:
写文章引言部分是我的最强项。引言部分每段话都有功能和目的的,有起承转合。段落里面的几句话都是有层次的。如果能用精炼的语言把本文的背景、目的、结果、重要性有逻辑性地讲清楚,层次分明、逻辑严密、凸现写作 ...

逻辑性真的很不错,顶!
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zhimin.w

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谢谢马老师,看到您在线。
您的文章对我帮助很大。
祝好!
102楼2010-11-19 00:24:54
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zhimin.w

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http://zhenmafudan.ycool.com/post.2941371.html 打不开链接

很想看这段,可惜好多帖子都打不开这个链接。
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zhenmafudan

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Originally posted by zhimin.w at 2010-11-19 00:27:28:
很想看这段,可惜好多帖子都打不开这个链接。

英语文章有种妙法是连珠炮似地问问题法。这种方法也被运用在科研论文中,达到强大的吸引眼球的作用。比如我写的文章Au/MxOy/TiO2 catalysts for CO oxidation: Promotional Effect of main-group, transition, and rare-earth metal oxide additives一文的引言部分第二段就用了这种杀手锏。http://dx.doi.org/10.1016/j.molcata.2007.04.007

这段英语的大意是:本小组前人发现用表面溶胶凝胶技术在氧化钛表面放上“一层”氧化铝,再放黄金,效果很好,该文以两页快报形式发表于美国化学会志。虽然那篇美国化学会志的效果非常吸引人,但是有几个问题没有搞清:(1)表面溶胶凝胶技术是必须的吗?能否用其他简便易行的方法达到同样效果?(2)“单层”氧化铝是必须的吗?如果是半层或者两层怎样?(3)氧化铝促进剂是与众不同的吗?用其它氧化物,能否实现类似或者更好的效果?(4)“超级稳定金催化剂”是“超级稳定”的吗?”在问了第四个问题后,我进一步解释说:“根据某某的权威综述,现在金催化研究的一个不理想的方面是催化剂稳定性都没有研究。在文献中,Au/Al2O3的失活很快,但是Au/Al2O3/TiO2是否会失活尚不清楚。”我这样写,就把读者的眼球牢牢吸引住了。

也许老板不是很喜欢我这么用连珠炮似地发问的写作手法,但是我当时强烈建议保留这段内容,因为这些话是我最得意之笔。为了证明这种表现方法是优美的,我来举书中的几个例子:

[1] Paul Burden, "An Educator's Guide to Classroom Management", p. 1.

Introduction

What do award-winning teacher do that make them so popular and successful? Do they jass up the curriculum in some way? Do they use especially creative instrumental approaches? Do they warm up to the students as if they are their own children? Do they add some magic or sparkle to the classroom experience? The answer is probably a little of each of these suggestions. But it likely goes deeper than that.

[2] John Hoover, "Difficult People", p. vxxx.

Preface

Why are some people so difficult to work with? What's the best way to deal with them? How can you cope with a boss who's a Slave Driver or a Bulley? What about the colleague who shows up repeatedly in your office to chat about personal matters? Why are some managers able to take difficult people in stride, while others feel overwhelmed by them? How do you avoid becoming a difficult employee?

In this book, we distill the wisdom of some of the best minds in the field of human resources to help you manage difficult people--perhaps one of the most challenging problems of the workplace. The language is simple and the design colorful to make the information easy to grasp.

[3] Barry Silverstein, "Managing People, p. viii.

Preface

How do you hire people? How do you encourage them to do a better job? What do you say to them if they don't? How do you fire someone who refuses to cooperate? How do you get your staff on board at a time of major change?

In this book, we will distill the wisdom of some of the best minds in the field to tell you how to do a better job at managing your employees and creating a workplace that supports the goal of your company. The language is simple and the design colorful to make the information easy to grasp.

[4] Dr. Robert Anthony, "50 Ideas That Can Change Your Life!", p. 44.

The Best is Yet to Be

How old do you think we are? I mean we--all of mankind. Do you think that mankind is in its early stages? Do you think that perhaps mankind has reached middle age and from here on it's going to be decline and further decline? Or, do you believe that mankind is appraoching the end, and that within a short time mankind will be no more upon the face of the earth, or out in the galaxies?

Personally, I think that the human race is only just now coming out of its earliest babyhood, the greatest lies ahead of us. Today, mankind is like a child of twelve or thirteen years of age in the Cosmic Universe.

[5] Donald J. Trump, B. Zanker, "Think Big and Kick Ass", p. 43.

Find Your Passion

Don't think about how you can make money. Instead think about what you can produce or what service you can offer than is valuable and useful to people and to your community. What needs to be improved? What can be done in a better or more efficient way? What problem can you solve? What needs can you fulfill? And most important, what you will you have fun doing?

[6] "Essential Skills for Science & Technology", p. 1.

Introduction

Congratulations on entering the world of higher education. As an individual, you have your own expectations and goals in life, and study may be an important component of these. What do you hope to gain from tertiary study? Is it a means to a future career? Are you here to broaden your mind? Are you here to gain an academic qualification? Or are you here until you decide upon your direaction in life? Whatever your reasons for choosing to undertake higher education, you do do knowing that there are financial costs, such as fees, and that it requires a considerable commitment involving time and hard work.
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英语文章有种妙法是连珠炮似地问问题法。这种方法也被运用在科研论文中,达到强大的吸引眼球的作用。比如我写的文章Au/MxOy/TiO2 catalysts for CO oxidation: Promotional Effect of main-group, transiti ...

真的非常感谢马老师百忙之中给回音。谢谢。
是否可以把您的原帖子修改下,把连珠炮提问附在文章最后。
只是建议,若原来的可以打开就不必了。
没其他事实,您忙。
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